Read this for Monday (click this link, then click the page icon that appears and the PDF will open).
Then post one 150 word comment here. What do you like best about this paper? What stands out most in your mind? What are the strongest parts of the argument? Are there any ideas or strategies you’d like to use in your own paper?
Wow Katie I love it you did great! Your’s I do believe flows very well I was able to follow it and understand the movie very well thanks to your great descriptions. I personally haven’t seen this one yet and I just added it to my netfliks because of your paper. I only really noticed 1 error as I got very involved reading it. The error was at the bottom of page 4, you meant to say male, but it got typed make instead. But I was so involved in the reading that I read it first and then it dawned on me about a sentence later. You argued and gave excellent reasons for God being a woman, and it’s totally plausible at that. I only hope mine flowed that well and made as much sense for others. I was kinda worried about that.
so I must say you can totally tell you well thought this out. By just reading it, it looks like something that could have been done in just two days. i would have to agree with the person above this flows very well I saw a few minor errors but nothing that would make your paper confusing. Did actually talking to Kevin help your paper? Or was he not that helpful? I liked how you picked a religious movie and talked about how jesus christ could be a girl or boy, good argument and details. Using race, sex, and culture. I hope mine flows well. I am not a good writter but I found writting the 8th page paper a lot more eaiser than writting the 6th page. Good job Katie!
Katie- Nice job. Lots of good quotes to back up your content. On page 3, paragraph 2 where you are talking about the bible; that seemed a little confusing… Maybe move the “The story of the Bible….. different languages for many years.” Up so it’s at the beginning and then describe them. “The most popular among Christians…” seems maybe out of the thought of this paragraph because it is mostly explaining the translations. Page 4, paragraph 2, should it say late night cable television… show? Not just television? I also like on that page where you state God is simply ‘God’. I agree with that also. In each religion there seems to be something or someone that is worshipped; maybe they are all the same thing just in different form. (Ok, can’t be a cow or something in my belief….) Page 5, I think John should be capitalized. When you say “read that book again, you mean the bible? Page 5, paragraph 2 I don’t think you meant to put a period after the word of. Page 7, since I am so impressed you were able speak to Kevin Smith personally if he said it was “Her motherly way of fixing the mess,” I think you might want to say that: “specifically quoted by Kevin Smith. ?
I was raised Catholic, so again the fear part would be correct… maybe you want to put some kind of quote or example in to show just how ritualistic Catholicism is, and how the Catholics get their guilt thing going. I like the point you drive home on the last page. Nice paper; just take these comments as that comments.
Well, concidersing this is my paper I could be extra critical and take up another 8 pages!!!
I need another page so I want to do some more research to explain my citations more and put more of my own thought into the quotes. I felt like my weakest point was that I didn’t put my own spin on some things and it’s pretty text-book-ish.
I’m excited to hear the criticisms though because I really hated my paper to begin with so hopefully I will be happy with the changes I make to it after the slaughter-o-katie day.
This was a very well written paper. I really enjoyed reading it as it was organized in a way that really brought you from point to point without any hitch in the story line. Kevin Smith is a fascinating character and I really enjoy his movies so it was lots of fun to be able to read and see someone diagnose his film and refute many of the points of controversy. I find it funny the anonymous nature of directors and the way that people may have trouble with what you write or create but rarely know what you actually look like. Not only did you answer the points that needed to be addressed but you did them through well noted and sometimes more obscure sources. I would never have thought of citing a podcast that’s for sure. Bringing up the history of the creation and translation of the bible helped very much in understanding the ludacris nature of finding fault in even poking fun at something. All in all a very good paper.
GOOODDD paper. The paper interested me right when i read the first paragraph. Which is good because it was not boring at all. I actually wanted to keep reading all the 8 pages you wrote. Which is rare for me. LOL
Anywho I liked the paragraph where you go into detail about jesus being portrayed in diiferent aspects of different movies. Also the history of the bible and how it has changed over the centuries. I almost thought that it was going to be insignificant but in the paragraph after that you tied the Dogma into it and I beleive that was the strongest part because instead of you going off on a tangent you made it all gel together. In reading your paper there was no moments where i felt like i dint understand what you were saying. Everything was clear to understand yet it was put in a way where it came across as strong. So yeah i really liked it. It makes me wish it was my paper!!!!!
This essay had one of the best opening paragraphs that I have ever read. It really caught my eye with the definition the word disclaimer, and then gave the disclaimer that I found to be very funny. I also like the fact that you brought up all of the points that could be taken badly by the Catholic Church; like the he changed to a she, the two fallen angels trying to end the world, and the adding of the extra apostle and making him black. The strongest point for me that I found in this essay would have to be you naming some of the other films that the Christians have had trouble with and that they got mad over, because it kind of helps the disclaimer of you can’t take this seriously. This was a very good essay and the part with the platypus was priceless it really made me laugh.