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Ann it’s great!! Youdid a good job of showing both good and evil, and where they came from all the way down to the bible. Only noticed a couple things, page one your first quote by Maltby there’s no end quotation marks at the end of her quote. Page 3 300 didn’t get italizied, other than that I didn’t notice any really cause I got caught up in your paper. I love this movie it’s one of my favorites too, and I agree when she says “a little girl” I get a little choked up too. To find true love, even if decieved at first, can be joyous. I wonder if they would ever make a sequel to that movie, or just leave it be, since Joanna former husband is also ingrained in evil. Knowing his wife is missing he parties it up and leaves her back in Elk Snout, until Joanna’s mother insists and comes to find her daughter. Great job getting everything to flow well and wonderful usage of so many examples and good one too.
Wow this is a great paper! I like how you didn’t really have a specific movie that you use. I mean you stuck with Overboard and used it in parts of your essay (which is a great movie in its self). I really like how you quote the Bible, it is a big part of my life and I like to see when other people believe it too, not saying that I do not like other people for not having the same religion. Anyway I like how you used lots of different sources and papers we used in class. I like how we got a historical background in the movies we watch. How action are for men but women and children like it too, movies are made for certain people and are almost always the same.
(good vs. evil) it sounds like a grudgematch. it also sounds like you put a lot of hard work into making sure you have persuaded the reader that good prevails every time, whether in life or movie. your introduction was meaningful, i got done reading that and i thought “whats the point” but you backed it up very strong which im guessing was yoyur intention because then it hit me “that was the point”. it left me wanting to read more. nice paper, i liked the use of the reference to the different movies in specific detail and the use of josephs blog in your paper. its a new concept, but i like citing from classmates. it makes your paper as if you are talking and we are not just reading. you also continually beat your focusing question into my head as i was reading which made it easy to stay in tune with what point(s) you were trying to get across. overall i liked your paper, it actually got me thinking of my paper when you were talking of the evil sins created by god. nice work.
I liked the paper from beginning to end .I have been listening to you talk about your topic over the last weeks and in the back of my mind I am thinking that would have to be a hard paper to write since theres’ probably not a lot of information out there on this one movie .You did a good job of tying in the aspect of good and evil! The one thing I would like to say about the issue of the Spartans and throwing the messenger into the well is that the country of Greece is being invaded by the Persians at this time .The Spartans choose this method to give the Persians a message of their own .Remember they are being invaded by an overwhelming force and they consider it an insult of the highest degree to be asked to subjugate to the invaders .Sort of like “now we are even “. Anyway good work on the paper ,well done, good story line you chose after all !
Ann,
I thought your paper was awesome. You had great biblical references support Good Vs. Evil. I think its funny that some people may not believe in God as I know you do but they still except the Bible as a credible source when you talk about good Vs. Evil. Your opening was a great way to relate it to your readers. I also liked how you kept things neutral. It was very well balanced and it is hard to disagree with you as well. I liked the 300 example you used in reference to PRIDE. I also like how you put the question in our face as a society asking us if we are responsible in some way. I thought your ending was interesting to leave us with a challenge was a cool idea. And leaving the challenge in a way to not make it about religion. Very well Done ANN!
Good writing! I liked the introduction alot! The paper flowed from one subject to another very well, but the only thing I had a hard time keeping up with was your movie Overboard. As I was reading I found myself forgetting which movie you picked because there was mention of so many others. Then as I read the conclusion you brought Overboard back to remind me. That’s really the only thing I had a hard time understanding in your paper.
Good paper. I love the way you set it up and love the happy ending. As I said to Daniel, and will probably say to everybody else who has a paper up here, I will not comment on gramatical or spelling errors. You had some great points, it leaned a lot towards one side (Religon) but that’s okay to me because it seemed like the side you wanted to get out to the world the most and that’s what’s important to you about this paper, to make sure your view is heard load and clear. My only big complaint with the paper is on page 3 when you have some sort of dialogue going on, I’m not sure if this is a scene from the movie or an interview or what it is. It seems like you just drop into it and it’s like “hello, wait what?” I tried to read over it a couple of times and I don’t know if I’m missing something personally or what but this part confussed me. Other than that, great job!
I really liked your paper. It kept hitting me with more and more good facts, one after another. They all applied right to your topic. All the movies you chose were excellent examples of good versus evil plots. The n the dialogue of the people making fun of 300 was a good way to show how other felt about-the good versus evil topic. It showed how people see something as being evil where as other people way see the same thing as being good. The one thing I can find to complain about was that there wasn’t a lot in the paper that was the reason people made films with a good versus evil plot. Although the section you did have on that part or the paper was really good. So maybe ad last a hair more on why the good VS. Evil is such a common plot line
I really liked this paper. It is even going to help me with revising mine, because you did such a good job of citing your sources which is one of the main problems with my paper. One piece of advice would be to try and get another definition rather than using Wikipedia, because people change it all the time, and even though they say they fix everything my friends and I found out that if you make subtle changes to the entries they won’t catch it. The conclusion is a very good one that applies to all who read it because you said whatever you believe. Also if I am not mistaken the commandment that you are thinking of is the second tablet of the commandments which deals with loving our neighbor. Just thought I would give you that little piece of information. The second commandment is “Thou shall not take the name of the LORD in vain”.
oh i read this yesterday and i really liked it then too. It is super easy to read. I like that it is straight forward enough so that even i know exactly what is happening, but it isn’t elementary. she uses lots of examples and proves her points. there is something new in every paragraph. i really like the intro because that is what this whole week and all of last weekend looked like. great weather for bike rides. anyways. i think my favorite thing about this is that it isn’t too complicated. i’m not exactly the brightest spark and i’m for sure really bad at “reading between the lines”. yeah? yeah.
Wow, this paper is really good. I really related to what your opinion of good and evil was. This essay showed that you understood what you were talking about. You used a lot of sources to help you in stead of just bulk up the page and I liked that. You also raised a good question about the Spartans and suicide bombers being wrong. I think that the little piece could be a really nice essay on its own. You presented a welll written paper that really excited me to read! thank you!
All I can say is: Great paper Ann…see I told you i knew you were a great writer. First of all…you have a good conclusion…this must have been from the free write about relating our thesis to something as a representation. I like that you used it for your intro. It was a smart idea because really actually reading it…you don’t know what exactly your paper will be about, but you want to read beyond it to see. It was allurring ( i don’t know how to spell it). And the line that says…”the smell of sweet lilac trees and daffodils mingle together” is a great i think similie to use. I can see the relationship to good vs evil in a way. I also did Love your conclusion. It was very strong and gives the reader that powerful sense that you really knew what you were talking about and were passionate about it too. I think using biblical quotes WERE smart. ” Thou shalt love thy neighbor as thyself.” It speaks for itself and the point of your paper. And I myself like happy endings especially the ones you feel you can relate to and I think that you relate to your movie (well obviously you do) because you said it was the same time your baby girl was born and people called you Annie…that’s cute.!! So good job Ann!!
Well here it is, your paper…I was telling you how I was really looking forward to reading it than that same day its posted! I really enjoyed reading your paper it flowed very well and made sense…especially your introduction. Had plenty of detail and reading it made me forget that I was actually reading it and made it feel like I was there at the picnic. i find stories with good detail more entertaining to read. I havent seen most of these movies our classmates are writting about. But after reading there papers makes me want to go rent some movies and relate them to peoples papers. I havent seen your’s either but it sounds like and interesting movie. Other than minor errors I noticed while reading your paper I enjoyed it and I think you did a good job!